Today’s National Poetry Writing Month (NaPoWriMo) prompt is: We challenge you to write a poem that is about something abstract – perhaps an ideal like “beauty” or “justice,” but which discusses or describes that abstraction in the form of relentlessly concrete nouns. Adjectives are fine too!
I don’t feel I really accomplished the “concrete” nouns, but unfortunately, I don’t have more time to work on this piece! Hoping to play with this more at a later date to get it more descriptive.
Panic
Wide eyes, hypnotized,
relentless butterflies,
twisted hands, tongue-tied,
soothing lies, gun-shy.
Jumping veins,
and thought trains,
dragging chains,
with my remains.
unwrithings 
Ahhh! I love the rhythm here. The punch and bounce. It captures that wild panicked feeling.
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Thank you so much! Definitely tried to capture that panicky feeling, I kind of started getting anxious just typing it haha.
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Oh my gosh I know the feeling. Someone can say “anxiety” one too many times to me and I get anxious! Keep up the great writing. 🙌🏽
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I think the concrete images are really effective in representing the emotion. And the musicality is great.
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I see concreteness here. While “butterflies,” “tongue tied” and “gun shy” could risk falling into cliche, they work well together for sound.
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Thanks for the feedback! I did feel like the phrases were a bit cliche, but glad they worked!
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I love this so much, the rhyme pattern really hit me square in the chest! Amazing work!
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Aw thank you so much. I really appreciate it!
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I thought there were good visuals! I could see it.
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Great ink x
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Thank you so much! 🙂
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A perfect description of panic.
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Thank you! I tried to capture how I’ve felt during times of panic.
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